Descriptive writing: sentences, paragraphs
Writing at four different speeds:
still, 30 mph,
70 mph, 120 mph
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Although it was an enormous station with at least six platforms, each one numbered with a huge black figure on a board, and all stretching as far as he could see without craning his neck, the whole place was empty: there was not a single passenger in sight. He thought that everything looked as desolate and as abandoned as the old factories which they'd passed.
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There was a steady rhythm in the way the train moved, a musical rhythm. He settled back in his seat and watched the hills slip by. A scatter of raindrops on the glass shivered there.
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He looks out of the window, feels his eyes hurt as they flick back and forth, trying to make sense of what he can see. A pub and a cutting. A stretch of a canal or a river. A change of note as they go through a tunnel. He sees a tractor in a long, brown field and a small cottage, a motorway bridge and a wood-yard. And they are gone.
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Blurred landscape; a rhythm like a drum machine. (Dee-dum, dee-dum.) Warehouses. Warehouses. Small town. A station. Can't read the name. Long bridge. A river. Just a glimpse. Look: a swan. A boat. Sunlight sparkling. The roar of the train. And what's that? What's that?
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